I think it is pretty good actually. Of course you misspelled lots of stuff but that isnt really what matters. You are a good writer. What exactly is your name anyway?

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Hi! Im only 12, and my friends like my poems, but i want to know what people that dont personally think of my potry. any thoughts are welcomened!




By: E. A. A.


DAte:March 20th




I have a feeling,


of utter most fear,


dispare, and torture.


I can sense,


the misty shape-


floating dilarious and oblivious,


desending down,


futher, farther,


now my eye to misty, dim,


lifeless eye.


she is breathing,


a breath nonexsistence,


so how can she be breathing....


if she is not there, or alive?




My heart is beating fast


uncontrolobly


but her heart has stopped,


a lifetime before,


held fast by pitiless death




She knows,


i know-


this is my end, my passing,


for she has known death,


and her apperance to me, a mortal,


means that it is my time,


to meet Death.